The story progression in this scene is very well done and in a community that's not exactly known for its good writing, you manage to incorporate a lot of realistic and believable dialogue that's subtle up until the transitional moment when things get real. A few misalignments with the hand placement when switching to POV near the end and I kind of wanted the scene to progress even more, but everything from the lighting to the dialogue to the transitions to the scene is incredibly well done. Great job!