Well frickin' done!  Very good job with the atmosphere, etc.  If you don't mind a suggestion.... If you use elevenlabs.io, you could give voices to all the characters, and instead of text between scenes or to give exposition you could perhaps do a shipboard AI to provide that, give her a hot female voice, and possibly the shipboard AI gets a bit jealous of Vega :-)  It allows you to have a 3rd character without impact to performance of the scene.  Just some thoughts :-)